# Chapter 1[F-DOC-01][F-NEG-01]

The morning began without incident.[F-LR-01]
She counted the hours until the train would carry her north.

# Chapter 9[F-RR-01]

Three days collapsed into a single paragraph here.
No one tracked where the cast had been, and the seam shows.

# Chapter 12[F-QAMB-01]

The lighthouse had stood unlit for the first time in forty years.[F-QT-01]
The town had grown used to the dark, used to the dark.

Findings

  1. [Could-Fix · F-DOC-01] the orientation pass flags a soft genre signal with no single manuscript locus — fix class: sharpen the opening promise. (See letter §F-DOC-01.) ↩
  2. [Must-Fix · F-LR-01] the opening scene states the want but never shows a cost, so the stakes stay abstract — fix class: give the want a price the reader can see. (See letter §F-LR-01.) ↩
  3. [Should-Fix · F-NEG-01] the chapter's POV discipline wavers in one paragraph — fix class: hold the POV or mark the break. (See letter §F-NEG-01.) ↩
  4. [Should-Fix · F-QAMB-01] the repeated phrase reads as an unearned refrain — fix class: vary or cut the echo. (See letter §F-QAMB-01.) ↩
  5. [Must-Fix · F-QT-01] the reveal of the unlit lighthouse lands as a stated fact rather than a felt beat — fix class: stage the reveal through a character's noticing. (See letter §F-QT-01.) ↩
  6. [Must-Fix · F-RR-01] the middle third's pacing collapses — three days pass in two sentences at Chapter 9, reading as a continuity break — fix class: restore a transit beat or an explicit time marker. (See letter §F-RR-01.) ↩